that one is ok but i was aiming for one where people acted as different people from the stroy or new ones and added to an adventure
eg
1st person writes - Nathaniel walked down the deserted street, hoping to find the disturbance which had caused major problems throughout London. He knew that Bartimeaus was flying own the next street in the form of a blackbird, and that there were other deamons overhead.
2nd person writes - Bartimaeus watched the street with keen eyes and was always aware that Nathaniel would call for him at any moment...
it then goes on with people either acting as a specific charater or adding to the story in some way